Sana
Paragraph 1 - The weather and atmosphere
It was a hot, sweltering day. There were beautiful, vibrant houses that glowed brightly in the sun . The sea was scorching hot and the concrete floor was white and boiling.The shiny blue roof tops were sunburnt from the blistering sun. The tall mountains were keeping guard of this beautiful place.
Paragraph 2 - The houses
The concrete floors and walls were white, cold and hard. The ground was bumpy but some parts weren't. The walls of the houses were a clean white and the roofs were a bright blue colour. The roofs shone dazzlingly in the sun. The windows were very intricate. Some of the houses were tall and vibrant but some houses were plane ordinary colour
Paragraph 3 - The ocean
The sizzling, clear, blue ocean shone brightly. The boats made huge amounts of bubble beneath the ocean as it moved around. The small waves gently hit the rocks on the shore . The shallow end of the water was light blue and clear but the deep end was dark blue but you couldn't see anything in it .
Paragraph 4 - The overall feeling of the place
I think that this place is beautiful, calm, peaceful, joyful and there are lots of things to do. If anyone would want to come here it would be me.
well done sana
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Deletegreat paraghing but next time use more deatil
ReplyDeletewell done Sana. I liked how you used a lot of coomas and you paragraphed it a lot. Next time use more capital letters
ReplyDeleteAkshara(your friend okay) :)
Amazing job SANA! i like how u used punctuation and sorted it out in to paragraph next time use more similes and metaphors
ReplyDeleteAmazing job Sana! I loved your adjectives and how you met your goal.Next time think of adding more information.
ReplyDeleteAmazing job Sana! I loved your adjectives and how you met your goal.Next time think of adding more information.
ReplyDeleteGREAT WORK I loved how you discribed the setting
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